Dork & Hat #2

So I went and wrote another two pages of Dork & Hat. These follow on directly after the first two pages.

Dork & Hat #2

Page 1.

Panel 1.

The plaza from the previous two pages. DORKMUFFIN and OLDHAT are still in their superhero form. Police officers are taking the thief away in handcuffs. Snow has started to fall from the sky.

Dorkmuffin: Is that snow? At this time of year.

Oldhat: It's probably nothing. The Super Squad alarm hasn't gone off.

Panel 2.

Close up on a small civil defence siren[1] attached to the corner of a buildings roof.

Siren: Calling all heroes. Doctor Cromarty's Doom Zeppelin sighted.

Panel 3.

DORKMUFFIN is giving OLDHAT the "I told you so" expression.

Dorkmuffin: Well let's get going!

Panel 4.

DORKMUFFIN and OlDHAT running towards the camera, swinging their weapons, the waiter from the café where they were is in the background. He is looking at the mess (turned over table etc.) with his hands in the air.

Oldhat: What about the bill?

Dorkmuffin: I dunno.

Page 2.

Panel 1.

We are on the deck of the doom Zeppelin, which is more like a sailing ship suspended below a giant bag of gas, as DOCTOR CROMARTY [2] zaps a giant ray gun bolt towards DORKMUFFIN and OLDHAT who are diving out of the way.

DOCTOR CROMARTY I don't know how to design his appearance. I want him to have a big bushy science beard and be wearing a kilt. A mad scientist with a giant ray gun and a doom Zeppelin that controls the weather.

Caption: Twenty minutes and one misadventure with rockets later.

Panel 2.

Close up on DOCTOR CROMARTY.

Doctor Cromarty (shouting): Die!

Panel 3.

DORKMUFFIN and OLDHAT are standing on the edges of the deck. DORKMUFFIN on the left and OLDHAT on the right. They are facing the camera. DOCTOR CROMARTY is roughly in the middle with his back facing us.

DORKMUFFIN: Why are you doing this?

Panel 4.

Close up, with dynamic lines, of DORKMUFFIN being blasted in the chest and pushed over the side of the Doom Zeppelin's railings by a bolt from the ray gun.

Doctor Cromarty: Because I can!

[1] Civil Defence Siren - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Civil_defense_siren
[2] Shipping Forecast - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shipping_Forecast

Expect another two pages and then I'm done.